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The cup of life by ~SouLXposed:iconSouLXposed:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Flaws blind my eyes
From seeing the soul.

So, I see haste and it's mistakes,
Selfishness and it's consequences,
Anger and stupidity.

I see true relections of people,
But not the entire masterpiece.
I've taken every mistake
And magnified it.

It can not be assumed
That the whole world is evil
Because of individual flaws.

Each and every thing is a gift.
Who are we to judge?
©2009 ~SouLXposed
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Author's Comments

This isn't the final piece but I wanted to see what you thought of it. This is a concept that I think I'll keep working on. So many people judge outward appearance, or even actions that people take and definine who they are without knowing them or mark them off as a bad person. I believe EACH person is made from the hands of God and is initially good. They may make decisions that we don't approve of, but they have good in them, too. Look at yourself. NO ONE is perfect, it's important to remember that. Each person is the way they are because certain things have affected them. Do not write people off because of your impression of them. You look with imperfect eyes and have can't realise what each person's battle is like. Remember that you're human. No better than anyone else.

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~InkSpirit Jul 5, 2009, 12:33:59 PM
mhmm i think the concept is good and i like the way you've expadned on it. if you can transfer those feelings into more poetry that'll be great!
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~waiting4wings Jul 5, 2009, 1:52:47 PM
Great - although it's a bit confusing to have the person blinded by everybody else's obvious flaws suddenly see everything and ask who we are to judge. I'd love if this was from the point of view of two people, or if you expanded on the realization.

The idea of it becoming more broad and philosophical is great - I just think it'd be really cool if you either made it more detailed in the middle, or made it sort of like a dichotomy. :D

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And that's all I have to say about that.
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~Laxaria Jul 6, 2009, 12:28:03 AM
Definitely a much better outcome than some of your previous pieces.

You have grasped the idea here, but you should try to expand it more. Utilise a metaphor or two to try and make the idea stand out even more.

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My Poems | 25 words of Inspiration | My Prose
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~SouLXposed Jul 7, 2009, 3:19:29 PM
I was thinking that I was going to expand on this. I liked the concept and just wanted to get it down. Thanks for your input :D

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
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~SouLXposed Jul 7, 2009, 3:22:29 PM
Mhmm.. Well, I was just taking from my viewpoint really. I judge a lot, but when I think about everything that I think, I realize how wrong it is.

I was thinking of making it more detailed, but I think I want to explore this topic a lot more and make separate pieces. What exactly is a dichotomy? lol

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
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~SouLXposed Jul 7, 2009, 3:23:04 PM
Thank you :D I think that I want to write a lot more on this topic, I really like it.

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
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~waiting4wings Jul 7, 2009, 6:40:10 PM
ah, okay. Well then, that makes sense -- ooh, do more pieces!

Dichotomy is like good and evil or like black and white.

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And that's all I have to say about that.
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~SouLXposed Jul 7, 2009, 9:08:56 PM
:D I believe I will. I really like the topic

Oh I gots it! hehe

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
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~waiting4wings Jul 9, 2009, 10:57:43 AM
Great! :D

I'm driving home on friday...:)

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And that's all I have to say about that.
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