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My 'thimble'
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I can see a little Peter Pan,
In his light blue eyes.
Faults and insecurities,
Covered in his lies.
He smirks and looks over,
"Oh, the cleverness of me!"
I roll my eyes and shake my head,
If he could only see.
That childish look,
And proud boasting face,
Makes me wonder,
Why it's him I chase.
He won't grow up,
He'll disinherit age's claim.
It doesn't matter if he gets older.
At heart he'll be just the same.
I don't know why,
But I feel I have to fight back.
Because if I didn't,
There would be something I lack.
He doesn't realise,
That his words just might
Pierce my heart,
Even if it's so simple a fight.
It's that childish way,
To love without feeling.
To live without growing up.
Peter Pan is a boy's way of healing.
Even if he'll never know.
My 'thimble' will always be his,
My childhood sweet heart, Peter Pan
Can have my imaginary kiss.
In his light blue eyes.
Faults and insecurities,
Covered in his lies.
He smirks and looks over,
"Oh, the cleverness of me!"
I roll my eyes and shake my head,
If he could only see.
That childish look,
And proud boasting face,
Makes me wonder,
Why it's him I chase.
He won't grow up,
He'll disinherit age's claim.
It doesn't matter if he gets older.
At heart he'll be just the same.
I don't know why,
But I feel I have to fight back.
Because if I didn't,
There would be something I lack.
He doesn't realise,
That his words just might
Pierce my heart,
Even if it's so simple a fight.
It's that childish way,
To love without feeling.
To live without growing up.
Peter Pan is a boy's way of healing.
Even if he'll never know.
My 'thimble' will always be his,
My childhood sweet heart, Peter Pan
Can have my imaginary kiss.
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Yeah, I watched peter pan today. Fun! lol
And I also had a fight with one of my friends, not a real fight, but I don't know, one of those brother sister fights. It was so wierd, when I was watching Peter Pan, the look in his eyes was exactly the same as my friend's when he's trying to tick me off!! Well, here you go! Critique is appreciated!
And I also had a fight with one of my friends, not a real fight, but I don't know, one of those brother sister fights. It was so wierd, when I was watching Peter Pan, the look in his eyes was exactly the same as my friend's when he's trying to tick me off!! Well, here you go! Critique is appreciated!
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My critique:
I thought this was fairly good, but I was disappointed when you let your rhyme scheme go. In stanzas one and two you had a good rhyme going, but after that you didn't rhyme at all. It disturbed the rhythm.
I thought this was fairly good, but I was disappointed when you let your rhyme scheme go. In stanzas one and two you had a good rhyme going, but after that you didn't rhyme at all. It disturbed the rhythm.