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Take me by the hand.
I'm too confused to see.
My tears consume my every sense.
My heart beat's rushed,
My face is flushed.
You're desperate to understand,
But I'd do anything to know.
©2009 ~SouLXposed
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A bit cliche, but it's cliche because it happens.

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:iconlaxaria:
It is fine to be cliched, but depending on how you work within a cliche makes or breaks a piece.

So yea, good job with this poem. Nice and interesting!

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Thank you very much! ^_^

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
:iconwaiting4wings:
It is cliche because it happens. I love your artist comment...

and I love this poem, it's short and sweet. :heart:

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And that's all I have to say about that.
:iconsoulxposed:
thank you :blowkiss:

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.
:iconinkspirit:
i definetly like how this ends. it's more special when a poem leaves you with something to think about or a feeling to digest. it adds a lot to a poem. the description is true and real
:iconsoulxposed:
Thank you :) I'm glad I made you think!

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I tear my heart open. I sew myself shut. My weakness is, that I care too much. And my scars remind me, that the past is real. I tear my heart open, just to feel.

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